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|Seventeen Minds Trying to Catch Up With One
A Checklist to Help Us Critique Our Own Manuscripts
Compiled by Jane Yolen's Centrum '81 Students
Edited by Anna Grossnickle Hines
SCBWI Bulletin 1981
|Note: In the first workshop I took with Jane Yolen these are the comments and questions that came up over and over as she helped us with out manuscripts. At the end of the workshop the seventeen of us sat down together and made this list. You may find it helpful to apply them to your own work.|
THE MOST COMMON PROBLEMS: WATCH OUT FOR THESE!
Do the children have power in their own behalf?
Do they solve their own problems?
Does the story really start where it starts?
Are the problems solved too easily?
Is the point of view consistent?
Have you tried to do half a dozen things in one story?
Have you used cliches rather than sharp language?
Does the story say what you want it to say?
Have you done too much describing and narrating rather than using action and dialogue?
Does everything in the story work or is it cluttered with unnecessary details?
Are your characters solid?
Read your story aloud, into a tape recorder if possible, and listen carefully for things that don't work.
Instead of asking, "Is this good enough?", ask, "Is there any way this can possibly be made better?"
"Children's books change lives. Stories pour into the hearts of children and help make them what they become." -Jane Yolen
Does your story have a theme?
Does the story fit the format or type of book you are writing?
Is it appropriate for the age level?
Is the way you are telling the story related to what you have to say?
Does your story have something new to say or does it say something old with a fresh viewpoint or in a new way? You need the eyes and ears of the child, coming fresh to things.
Does it have the kind of toughness that children have and need, or is it sweet and sappy?
Does it have sentiment (heart) or just sentimentality?
Are you being condescending, talking down to the child?
Are you unconsciously trying to do more than one story at the same time?
Are you mixing two or more different styles?
Are you trying to cover too long a time span or too much material in one book?
Do you let your story carry itself or do you try to teach?
Does everything in the book ultimately focus on the same point and work on all levels.
Have you used language economically?
Are you comfortable with the language?
Does the style match the material?
Have you used cliches or good, crisp images?
Is your language sharp, creating clear images?
Have you used good, strong nouns and verbs and avoided superfluous adjectives?
Have you repeated something unnecessarily?
Do you over-use particular words and phrases?
Have you used vivid sensory words and images throughout your story?
Do you have a variety of sentence lengths and structures?
Do you over-use "ing" words?
Do the transitions from one thought or event to the next work or are they jarring?
Do you use narration where dialogue and action would carry your story better?
Have you chosen the best point of view for this story? If it's concerned with the emotions of one particular character, try first person. If you need the descriptions and information that first person forces you to leave out, stick to third.
Does the language of a character help reveal something about him or her?
Are all the characters in the story necessary?
Are they stereotypes?
Are the names just exactly right?
Is your villain, if there is one, as strong and real as your hero?
Does the main character grow or change through the course of the story?
Have you kept introspection to a minimum and shown the emotions through the actions, reactions and dialogue that keep the story moving?
Is there an emotional range with high highs and low lows or just a boring gray?
Do you have a plot or just a series of incidents?
Do you get your character up the tree so he has to come back down, or does he just come to the tree and walk away without anything really happening?
Does the plot build appropriately or just meander?
What is the problem to be solved or explored in the book?
Do you get right to it in the beginning?
Do you begin at the beginning? Start with the action?
Does the story keep alive with the suspense, the curiosity to know what happened next?
Do you have cliff hangers at the ends of the first few chapters to get the reader hooked into reading further?
Does the child face and solve, or at least help to solve, his own problem?
Do you believe in it yourself?
Does it have its own logic and have you followed it consistently?
If there is magic, does it have consequences? Is it tough magic?
Does the hero have honesty, courage, goodness and love?
Is his problem or foe big and tough and evil?
Is there a sense of justice?
Does the hero have to make fateful, heart wrenching decisions?
Does it have an appropriate style?
Is your story based on an emotional involvement rather than a "hot subject"?
Do you really deal with the character and not just the problem?
Do you offer some direction or ray of hope or just expose a problem, rubbing the wounds raw?
Would you feel comfortable with your own young child reading the book?
Does the book open the child to something new or tell him something he or she vitally wants to know?
Is it accurate?
Is it clear? ie: without jargon or terminal cute-less.
Is it complete within the realm of what you're trying to do?
Is it written with movement, style and wit?
Does it speak to the child's sense of wonder rather than being pedantic?
Does it lead the child on to other discoveries?
Does the story deal with one simple concept or story line?
Are there enough and appropriately spaced visual images to illustrate?
Will it fit into the format of a 32-page book?
Is the language bare-boned and economical but still full of style?
For serious writers, the question isn't, "Is my story good enough?" A better question is, "Is there any way I can make it better?" These questions can help you answer that question.
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